http://macaulay.cuny.edu/eportfolios/vadim Writing from Vadim's portfolio Tue, 07 Apr 2009 20:13:33 -0400 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.6 hourly 1 http://macaulay.cuny.edu/eportfolios/vadim/short-fiction/story-1-version-1/#comment-2 John Marren Tue, 07 Apr 2009 20:13:33 +0000 http://macaulay.cuny.edu/eportfolios/vadim/?page_id=9#comment-2 hey man, looks good, I like it so far, cool tone to it. just a few minor typos nothing big, as far as feedback, Id just say it sounds like the narrative voice is a horny 15 yr old boy but, its very believable. hey man, looks good, I like it so far, cool tone to it. just a few minor typos nothing big, as far as feedback, Id just say it sounds like the narrative voice is a horny 15 yr old boy but, its very believable.

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