Comments for Honors Thesis Colloquium 2009-10 https://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09 Wed, 24 Feb 2010 03:05:52 +0000 hourly 1 https://wordpress.org/?v=6.4.3 Comment on Link to February 10th assignment by Noia Efrat https://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/2010/02/08/80/#comment-37 Wed, 24 Feb 2010 03:05:52 +0000 http://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/2010/02/08/80/#comment-37 Hi Nor,
While your use of short sentences permit clarity in an otherwise fact-laden topic, longer sentences might help to keep ideas together as the reader goes along.
Also, it might be good to give readers an idea of where you are leading them with the facts that follow by making a topic sentence that alludes to the idea of the paragraph more explicitly.
When you quote Ayub Kahn’s comments on his coup for example, try and reiterate the implications (in reference to your argument) of his statement. You do this well after the quote, but work on melding together the conflict between his intentions and the “actual reality” as you see it, into a coherent (one or two), richer sentence right after the quote. In other words, don’t chop it up so much and use more flowing sentences; I think this could keep the reader more on track with your aim.
Otherwise, I find your use of content and evidence very clear and accessible. You also have a nice journalistic tone in some parts (see middle of pg. 4) that I would like to see come out more.
–Really good job.

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Comment on Links for February 17 by Lindsey Freer https://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/2010/02/16/link-for-february-17-assignment/#comment-36 Wed, 17 Feb 2010 01:50:04 +0000 http://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/?p=104#comment-36 Lili, when I try to open that link I get a “404 — File not found” error.

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Comment on Links for February 10 by Noia Efrat https://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/2010/02/03/links-for-february-10/#comment-35 Tue, 09 Feb 2010 04:34:05 +0000 http://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/?p=69#comment-35 Here is the link to my 5 pages… (try#1)..
http://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/noiaefrat/2010/02/08/excerpt-from-the-ethical-grounds-of-psychoanalysis/

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Comment on Janet by lquinby https://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/2009/11/07/janet-2/#comment-34 Sun, 08 Nov 2009 15:07:04 +0000 http://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/?p=52#comment-34 Thanks Janet. The computer I am working on at this moment doesn’t open up the Korean files but I will see if my Apple at Macaulay will work. Don’t forget to put your access date in your citation.

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Comment on Janet by Ko (Janet) Shin https://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/2009/11/07/janet-2/#comment-33 Sat, 07 Nov 2009 19:07:15 +0000 http://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/?p=52#comment-33 Professor, I have posted my updated bibliography with the Korean sources. http://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/janetshin/2009/11/07/bibliography/

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Comment on Wednesday Conference sign-up schedule by lquinby https://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/2009/10/23/wednesday-conference-sign-up-schedule/#comment-32 Sun, 25 Oct 2009 14:33:55 +0000 http://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/?p=45#comment-32 Thanks, Patrick, You have the 4 PM slot.

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Comment on Wednesday Conference sign-up schedule by Patrick https://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/2009/10/23/wednesday-conference-sign-up-schedule/#comment-31 Sat, 24 Oct 2009 20:18:09 +0000 http://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/?p=45#comment-31 Hi Lee, I would like to meet with you at 4.

Thanks,
Patrick

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Comment on Oct. 7 conferences by Lili Salmeron https://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/2009/10/01/oct-7-conferences/#comment-30 Tue, 06 Oct 2009 19:44:48 +0000 http://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/?p=30#comment-30 Hello Lee,

Thanks for the feedback! Also, can I come in at 2pm?
Thanks.

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Comment on Oct. 7 conferences by larryrobinson https://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/2009/10/01/oct-7-conferences/#comment-29 Tue, 06 Oct 2009 02:56:41 +0000 http://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/?p=30#comment-29 Hi,

Is 4:30 ok?

Larry

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Comment on Oct. 7 conferences by Noia Efrat https://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/2009/10/01/oct-7-conferences/#comment-28 Mon, 05 Oct 2009 14:18:14 +0000 http://eportfolios.macaulay.cuny.edu/honorsthesis09/?p=30#comment-28 Hi Lee. Do you still have a 4:00 slot open?
Thanks,
Noia

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