User talk:Andrew.Gursky

From The Peopling of New York City

This page needs a more descriptive title to distinguish it from Jose's page. Also, you need to adjust your introduction to reflect the fact that you are discussing challenges with the mass transit system as revealed in your interview with Prof. Peters. You should move that second paragraph before the interview box up to your introduction because it sets up what you are doing on the page. You first describe a transit system and then give the expert's opinion about it. Beyond that you don't need to change much on the page. Could you find away to make the trivia facts more prominent? They are very interesting.

I have made a number of small adjustments in wording for clarity and grammar. Please check to make sure that I haven't changed the meaning of some of your sentences.

I just realized that this is your user page. You should create a new page with a NEW TITLE and copy this info to it. That way your page will not say User: Andrew Gursky at the top.

--Maria.Bellamy 16:29, 1 May 2010 (UTC)